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In some cultures children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantage on this advantage of giving children? This is a message.

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children
 they can achieve
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anything
 by trying hard? hame cultures,
children
 are often told that they can achieve
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anything
 if they try hard
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enough
.
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and
this
 message to them can produce several effects on each child
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a
 social point of view, telling
this
 to
children
 is very important because we are motivating the hid not to give up. We are making him
to
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try hard, to make an effort, to read between
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 and
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 end of that long path
achieve
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 their objectives. Telling that they can achieve
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amazing
 if they my hard enough, we are saying
in other words
 that things are not so simple or easy but they are not
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impossible
, is all about working hard and doing our best. sometimes
this
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helpful
 because we
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 always achieve our dreams or goals but it does not
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 we did not try hard, it was just because another person deserve it more than
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. So,
although
 w. try hard, there are other factors playing a role in our path.
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the
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 economic point of view, if our objectives demand a lot of money, we are again in the same
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,
although
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 we work hard, it would be difficult to achieve it
To sum up
, we are teaching
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children
 how life works, it demands hard work, effort, dedication, lime doing things we don't like, studying and attitude. And
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 the end, if you have done all these things but you still did not achieve your goal, you will be happy anyway because you did your best.
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