Two charts are given in the presented illustrations. The former one conveys information on how energy is consumed in a mundane Australian family, while the latter diagram shows the figure of greenhouse gas emissions that are a result of the energy use

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Two charts are given in the presented illustrations. The former

one

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conveys information on how energy is consumed in a mundane Australian family,

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the latter diagram shows the figure of greenhouse gas emissions that are a result of

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energy use.

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it is clear that

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an overwhelming difference is seen when comparing the two. As can be seen in the first pie chart, heating takes up the majority of energy utilization with a whopping 42%.

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is twofold the

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of the other five elements.

On the other hand

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, cooling appears to

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the lowest number with a mere 2%.

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, the second diagram displays the factor which is emitting the most gas

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water heating at a rate of 32%. With no more than 3%, cooling is once more at the bottom. A

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similarity

could be noticed between both charts

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since both low percentages tend to be cooling.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

152 words

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Two charts are given in the presented illustrations. The former one conveys information on how energy is consumed in a mundane Australian family, while the latter diagram shows the figure of greenhouse gas emissions that are a result of the energy use

Your next door neighbor owns a small dog that barks throughout the day and the night. Write a letter to your neighbor requesting that something be done about the dog. Include in your letter: oYour reason for writing oWhat you would like to happen oA nice, respectful style.

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