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Some people believe that adults should give children freedom to make mistakes. Other think that adults should prevent children from making mistakes Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Most people think
the
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children
 making some
mistakes
 was unforgivable, and some accidents would happen. So they often prevent them and spoke loudly to scare them. But from some people's experience,
children
 should have a range to make some
mistakes
 but
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 keeping to safety, and they would know that was not correct. In fact, there are only a few
parents
 who agree that
children
 have the freedom to make
mistakes
.
For example
, from these
parents
' experience, most
children
 were not scared of anything in their childhood. They always tried everything like touching fire, climbing
the
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 tree or doing some dangerous activity, so their
parents
 think they only tried these dangerous activities, but it must safely not affect their lives, and when they found that activity would hurt
themselves
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,
children
 would know that it was dangerous and not correct from their heart. Other
parents
 think they must prevent
children
 from making any mistake that would affect their whole life.
For example
,
children
 make some
mistakes
 like they stole some items in the store and they lie to their
parents
. Nothing happened. Their
parents
 were scared they would become thieves in the future, so they would speak loudly to scare their
children
 not educated to them. Maybe that was useful at
this
 time, but most
children
 would stand up to their
parents
, and
this
 education was the fault
from
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I saw. So in my view, I agree that
children
 should have the freedom to make
mistakes
,
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 because they will be learning how to protect themselves and know what things are correct. That will be a useful education for
children
’s growth.
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