Some people believe that governments should pay for healthcare and education, but others disagree with this opinion Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The role of
governments
in society should help
people
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problems, like
healthcare
and
education
which
were
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people
can not to
paid
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these fee
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by themselves in some areas. So I
agree
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this
advice that
governments
to
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pay for
healthcare
and
education
for
people
.
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,
the
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healthcare
and
education
was
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people
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basic protections when they lived in the world. most
people
can pay it for themselves from work that
people
paying
the
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taxes to
governments
at
same
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time. And the taxes would be used
for
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build and rapid the city and
it
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also
to
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pay back
for
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people
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healthcare
and
education
. So honestly, the
governments
should
to
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pay from gov economic funds. And these
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people
’s access for enjoyed
the
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healthcare
and
education
from the
governments
when they live in the country.
Secondly
, a good policy for
healthcare
and
education
was shown the country’s power and
their
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development.
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like
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north
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Europe countries, their citizens did not
to
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pay anything when they go to the hospital or got
the
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education
from child to adult. So from these
countries
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people
about their happiness scores were very high for their government policy. And another example from China,
why
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there have none of the
people
never get
the
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education
in
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today, the government cancelled some
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from
education
for the village students. So the large
of
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population country solve the
education
problem for all of the citizens. So that was why I agree
governments
should solve
about
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people
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healthcare
and
education
problems to pay
these fee
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this fee
these fees
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for all of the
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal healthcare
  • public education
  • taxpayer burden
  • financial stress
  • equal opportunity
  • workforce development
  • public health
  • literacy rates
  • tax revenue
  • government expenditure
  • inefficiency
  • long waiting times
  • accessibility
  • quality of education
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