Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.Do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, lots of
food
products have added
sugar
so much.
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is a highly controversial topic that
food
products have high
level
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of
sugar
is harmful health of
people
.
Therefore
, some experts have a proposal that the
price
of
sugar
have
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to raise. In
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and positive aspects of
this
topic. Producers of
sugar
are high in
sugar
prices
seem
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a good way to encourage
people
to control
income
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of
sugar
. Whilst, one of the biggest issues with
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price
of
sugar
is that a lot of fond products that have ingredients of
sugar
will become princely. The producers sell expensive
sugar
to shops or markets.
In addition
, lead to many
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is made of
sugar
also
overpriced.
Furthermore
, some
people
that very like
sugar
they
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also
buy it. So
this
view can’t solve
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. What’s more, there are
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of
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suggestion in
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. The overpriced
sugar
have
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many inconvenient aspects in
industry
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.
Sugar
is a useful material.
For instance
,
this
stuff
always
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used to make medication or detergent in industry.
Therefore
, it is unreasonable that
people
have to spend much cost to buy
sugar
because they have to use
sugar
to make dedication and detergent. Combining the two opinions, we can know that
this
proposal is completely wrong.
However
, there is a benefit
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increasing the
price
of
sugar
is
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that some public
they
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don’t think
sugar
is necessary, so they don’t usually buy
sugar
or
food
is
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made of
sugar
.
For example
, some
people
always choose cheap
sugar
in
market
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. But they can’t buy it when
sugar
become princely. In conclusion, as can be
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from the points made in
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, I strongly
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this
view, because
the
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overpriced
sugar
lead to
market
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a market
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of chaos with
sugar
price
.
Furthermore
,
this
point brings many problems in
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.
Therefore
, I believe that government should publicize
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of
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sugar
income rather than let producers of
sugar
raise the
sugar
price
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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