The three pie chart below show the total school spending in UK in three periods.

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IELTS Writing Task Chart for The three pie chart below show the total school spending in UK in three periods.
This
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chart shows the total distribution of school spending in the UK over 3 periods
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, we can observe that
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teachers’
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salaries
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were the most financed sector. In 1981, we see that the
salaries
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represented 68% of the total expenses, with professor
salaries
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being 40%,
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other workers' fees
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up 28%. In the 90s, the payroll for staff members rose by 10%, yet only for the teachers, who get half of all
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financing. The rest have decreased by 6%.
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the beginning of the 21st century, staff payment experienced a drop, being worth 60%. Both the
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and the workers'
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reached a record low, the first at 55% and the second at 15%. As for the other sectors, the resources took 15% of the chart in the first period.
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it may have had a small increase by 5% in 91, it reached a
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of 9% in 2001. Insurance,
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, has continually grown, from 2% to 3 to 8% over three periods.
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, furniture was a sixth
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budget in the 80s, fell to 5%
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recovered in the
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period to 23%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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