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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#media #interaction #people #society
It is undoubtedly true
the
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 social media have replaced the traditional ways of communication.
While
 I accept that there are
few
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a few
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 disadvantages of
internet
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the internet
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, I believe it is more likely to have a constructive approach
due to
 certain reasons. To commence with, social media have numerous merits that are positively impacted
people
’s life. The main factor is to consider that technological advancement breaks down
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geographical barriers. To illustrate, communication
have
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 been improved with the help of
internet
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the internet
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 and other media apps
such
 as Facebook, and
snapchat
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. Another key consideration is that
people
 can talk from The various parts of the world.
For instance
,
the
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 study of American students
have
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 shown that only 25% of youngsters are using
this
 feature,
consequently
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 the use of landlines
have
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 reduced over the period.
However
, certain
people
of
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the
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society argue that
this
 phenomenon is worsening the situation
instead
 of improving it.
Firstly
,
people
 are being
over dependent
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over-dependent
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 upon these technologies.
This
 is
due to
 the fact that
people
 like to talk on call, and avoiding face to face communication.
As a
result
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 some
people
 are suffering from mental illnesses
such
 as depression, anxiety and bipolar. Apart from it,
the
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people
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people's
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 privacy is at high risk as they are sharing their
achievement
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 and thoughts very often.
Therefore
,
people
 are being bullied, and stacked by online strangers. To exemplify
this
, one of the
girl
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 was killed by a man who was following her on every social platform. In conclusion, I claim that the potential benefits of
this
 statement are more significant than the possible dangers,
thus
 it is
positive
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a positive
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 phenomenon.
Submitted by Navneet Dhand on

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