The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the percentage of visitors to England who come to see
variety
of Add an article
a variety
the variety
atrraction
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attraction
attractions
such
as art
gallery
, Fix the agreement mistake
galleries
pavilion
, pier, and Fix the agreement mistake
pavilions
festival
, in Fix the agreement mistake
festivals
Brigthton
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Brighton
start
from 1980 to 2010.
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starts
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the number of people who visited pier
and festival remained stable, Correct article usage
the pier
then
there was a fluctuation of
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in
visitor
who came to Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
pavilion
. In the Add an article
the pavilion
last
, there was a significant decrease in the art
gallery
.
Look at the detail, as regards to art
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an art
the art
gallery
, started from 10% of visitors and rose to around 15% in the next five years. This
figure rose to approximately 24% in
the end of the year. Change the preposition
at
Moreover
, the number of tourist
who visited Change to a plural noun
tourists
festival
was considerably Correct article usage
the festival
unchange
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changed
with
more or less 30%.
As for Change preposition
by
pavilion
, around 25% of tourists visited in 1980 and followed by Correct article usage
the pavilion
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a sigificant
sigificant
increase to just under 50%; Correct your spelling
significant
this
figure was the highest number of tourist
to England among the attractions. Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
However
, there was significant
decrease to just over 30% in 2010. Add an article
a significant
For the
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The
last
attraction type in Brighton was art
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the art
gallery
. Started at just over 20% and then
hit the bottom at just below 10%.Submitted by misstiasclassroom on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words art, gallery with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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