You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year

before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys

asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
The
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the results of
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comfortable when visitors visit in Ashdown Museum during the
year
previous and the following
year
.
Overall
, the number of visitors during the
year
after increase quite a lot of than the
year
before.
To begin
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of very satisfied has a dramatic grow up in the
year
after, 15
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increase to 35%
while
, the
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of no response has not
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changed, still at 5
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in the
year
after. The
percent
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of satisfied have a little increased in the
year
after.
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the other hand, the
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of
dissatisfied
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in the
year
before has
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quite a lot
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in the
year
after.
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, the
percent
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of very dissatisfied have a small broken up in the
year
after, reduce to 5
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instead
of 10
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. In conclusion, the results of
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and
also
the number of visitors have increased
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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