Some people say that travelling abroad is necessary to get knowledge about other countries, while others suggest that TV and the internet can also help people know about foreign countries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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trend in technology and it is
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present
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on our life
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as researching on
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or taking
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. Obviously ,
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and television can help us to
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information
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about foreign
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. Yet , there is some disagreement as to whether getting
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from
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is enough or
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whether this
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knowledge
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necessary
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to travel abroad.
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there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary ,I personally believe that travelling
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countries
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is more
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on our minds. In
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. First of all , it is an undeniable fact that if people see something with their own eyes , it is create more realistic ideas in
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brain
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to say , seeing and touching something in real life gives a more real
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for experience
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that
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in mind more than
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from other people or
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on television
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. In Denmark,
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, children who students in first class travel
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village to learn about their back history and when they see those things in their own eyes , they did not forget anything about that .
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, technology has been growing and
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growth supplies
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of
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about overseas
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. Clearly ,
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internet
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provide
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lots of options for
informations
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information
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about cultural food and places
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in
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abroad
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.
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, in my own homework on local food in Spain , ı looked
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internet
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for
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instead
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of
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there .
To sum up
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, there have been lots of options on
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internet
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to take
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about overseas
countries
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.
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, travelling abroad and seeing
with
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apply
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local things with our own eyes is more
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for our own experiences and
knowledge
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.
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