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In the future all cars, bues and trucks will be driverless. The only people traevelling inside these vehichcles will be passengers. Do you think the adventages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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As technology is constantly changing and evolving, in the future, the automobile industry will not require any driver to operate, as transportation will be done only by
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passengers.
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 automobile outweigh the advantages. One of the main advantages of self-driving is that it decreased traffic accidents caused by human error. As these transportations use a computer system to operate, it eliminates the errors caused by humans which can improve the safety of the travellers.
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 buses, and the statistics show that the computer system generates
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improve
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 the safety of its traveller by ninety twenty per cent compared to a bus with a driver.
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, the elimination of drivers can lead to some worrying issues. One of the prominent issues will be the
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increase
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unemployment
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 rate. With automobile transportation, people will be jobless, as their job has been taken by the computer system.
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 negatively.
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, there will be economic uncertainty,
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 in consumption and an
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 crime rates.
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,
government
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 will have to
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 their expenditure, as they have to
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 the cost of welfare support. In conclusion,
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driverless
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 cars, buses and trucks can
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eliminate
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traffic accidents, there will be an
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 unemployment rates which can affect the economy as a whole which is a difficult issue to tackle.
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, the negative effects of
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transportations
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definately
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definitely
 outweigh the positives.
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