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The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar diagram illustrates the total number of
minutes
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 spent on telephone calls in Australia from the year 2001 to 2008, where the calls are categorised into three groups, local, national and international, and mobile. Units are measured in billions of
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.
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, though the gap between the
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 spent on local calls and other modes of telecommunication kept falling over
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, annual used
minutes
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 on local calls always remained the highest throughout the
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. Meanwhile,
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 spent on both national & international and mobiles continued increasing consistently, but the local call
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 started declining gradually from the middle of
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 seven-year range The local call
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 experienced the highest trend throughout the
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, starting from 72
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minutes
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 in 2001 to
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 a peak of 90
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minutes
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 by 2005,
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 trend
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 slipped back to 72
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minutes
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 in 2008. As for national and international the popularity of these types of calls increased slightly, beginning from 38
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minutes
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 to finishing at 61
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minutes
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 by the end of the
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, mobile calls witnessed a slight growth
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, beginning the
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 with 2
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minutes
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 merely. Having experienced a gradual increase until 2005 with around 12
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minutes
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, mobile call
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then
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 rocketed to 46
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minutes
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 by the end of
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period
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, time, period, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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