You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter describe a news story in your country explain why people are interested in it say how the story personally relates to you

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Dear Kelvin, Have a great day. I am writing

this

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letter to send

for

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apply

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you some

news

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story

last

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week about the society

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Viet Nam.

Last

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time you told

with

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me that you want to go to Viet Nam for

working

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here so you are following all

news

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about my country before you come. Today I will show you special

news

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from

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last

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week, in the

news

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has

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a big house

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was

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burned by

the

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fire

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. All people

was

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following

about

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this

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news

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since in

this

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house have 3 kids and one

their

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of their

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grandmother

were died

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died

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, the

fire

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start

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from the gas in the kitchen. fireman and all

neighbour

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neighbours

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tried to help them but all of them were unlucky. The sad

news

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affect

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all people, from

this

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news

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human

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a human

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must be

carefull

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careful

with

fire

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, which can burn

every thing

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everything

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. People must turn off the gas stove after

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they

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cook, it is very dangerous for us. When I

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was 5

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years old, I tried to cook

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the egg

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egg

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but I do not know how to turn off the gas stove too, but so lucky when my mother

comeback

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come back

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home catchup time before the

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burn my house. I will send

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you another

news

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next time. See you soon. Cindy.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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2
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
26
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

211 words

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You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter describe a news story in your country explain why people are interested in it say how the story personally relates to you

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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