The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009
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The pie chart illustrates the sources from which electricity is generated in
France
and
Germany
in the year 2009.The electric current produced in
Germany
is relatively high by 50 when compared to
France
.The highest contribution is from thermal and nuclear spirit respectively.
Similarly
,effectiveness is high in
Germany
as its production is based on renewable when compared to
France
. Annually 560 billion kWh of power is generated in
Germany
out of which, more than 50 per cent of it is from a conventional thermal plant.
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one-quarter of the generated power is from the nuclear station. And the rest is from transferred energy , where three a fourth of the voltage is transformed from biomass and wind energy.Hydroelectric makes up to one-fifth of the efficiency of renewable.
Furthermore
, solar strength is
also
being converted to the current.But, none of the geothermal energy is useful. In ,
France
510 billion kWh is produced out of which nearly three quarter is from the nuclear plantation.Only one-tenth is from the thermal root. Renewable sources contribute 13.7 per cent.The most spirit transformed to power is from hydroelectric nearly 80 per cent.
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biomass and wind together make up about one-fifth.
however
,solar accounts for very less.
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