Some people say that educational success depends almost entirely on the attitude of the student. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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To a greater extent, I agree that educational success depends almost entirely on the attitude of the student simply because

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there are a lot of educated people who are barely making it. Meanwhile, there are some people who are not educated but successfully making it in life.

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, I disagree on that to a lesser extent educational success depends almost entirely on the attitude of the student simply because, regardless of

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of one being, education transforms people.

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to that, education enables one

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solution to any challenge in life.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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95 words

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Some people say that educational success depends almost entirely on the attitude of the student. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

With the growing population of cities, more and more people live in homes that have little or no outdoor area. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

Prevention is more important than cure. researching and treating disease is very costly, so it is better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, news companies spend a lot of money covering international news. However, local news is more relevant to people's lives and should receive more funding. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?