The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
line chart illustrates the
number
of
enquiries
received over by the tourist information office for three two-month
span
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in 2011. It is clear from the graph that
number
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a number
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of tourists who received in person, the most ratio increased.
According to
what is shown,
number
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the number
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of
enquiries
received by latter, email and telephone decreased relatively.
To begin
with January, they were close to each other by numbers. After that, witnessed a small dip for both.
Then
, in February amount of
letter
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letters
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and
email
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emails
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got
a
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soar
while
amount
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the amount
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of
telephone
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telephones
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climbed respectively. After a
while
,
number
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the number
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of
enquiries
which
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received by letter and email continued
decreased
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until May.
Then
, it recovered and
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was consistented
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consistented
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consistent
in
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at
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same
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level.
While
the ratio of
letter
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letters
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decreased, the amount of telephone got a rocket in the numbers. The most striking feature of the graph is,
figures
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of
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enquiries
received in person, it was the least figure.
Then
, witnessed a soar until March. After that, it got a rocket until became the highest ratio in January.
To sum up
, we could say that the highest
number
was in January, which contained
by
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1800
enquiries
, that
was
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were
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for people received in person.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, enquiries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rocket" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "soar" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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