The graph below shows the average monthly use of health club in Miami and Florida by all full-time members in 2017. The pie charts show the age profile of male and female members of this health club. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The images illustrate the activity of full-time
members
of a Health club in Florida and Miami during the year 2017, comparing the installations usage
by Change to a genitive case
the usage of the installation
Female
and Fix the agreement mistake
Females
Male
which are Fix the agreement mistake
Males
also
divided by age range. Data shows that there are more male members
using the club installations compared to the
female Correct article usage
apply
members
every month.
Is it clear that the majority of gender
using the installations is the masculine Correct article usage
the gender
one
increasing the usage during June, July and August peaking Correct pronoun usage
ones
more
than 800 Change preposition
at more
members
and it gradually decreases until december
with 600 Change the capitalization
December
usage
Change to a plural noun
usages
.
We can observe a similar growth with the female gender where numbers Change the punctuation
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increasu
during summer seasons compared to winter with a maximum of 750 Correct your spelling
increase
increased
members
and maintans
until Correct your spelling
maintains
end
of Correct article usage
the end
september
. There is Change the capitalization
September
also
a major trend on
women and men aged between 21 and 45 years old using the gym facilities and a minority of Change preposition
of
members
younger than 21 years old using the health club.Submitted by celinedoultremontt on
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