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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
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The following graphics evaluates the usage of three different household appliances from 1920 until 2019 and
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 the number of hours a week dedicated
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 housework over the same period of years.
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 the first chart, we see that there is an increasing major trend
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 the usage of electric appliances
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 2019 over
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70%. On the second chart where we can oversee an evolution
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 the opposite direction where the number of hours dedicated
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 washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning decreases dramatically in 1960 and keeps on
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 until 2019. Going more into detail with the first illustration, the refrigerator is the one that
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speedily
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 over the decades reaching the top
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 1980 and remaining static until 2019. It can be seen a similar growth with the
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 it reached
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100% two decades after de fridge.
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