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Charts A and B show the share of the UK and Australian cinema market in 2001 and cinema admission in the UK and Australia from 1976 to 2006. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

Charts A and B show the share of the UK and Australian cinema market in 2001 and cinema admission in the UK and Australia from 1976 to 2006. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The bar graph below illustrates a comparison between the films that were screened in the
UK
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 and
Australia
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 in 2001 and a second graph comparing the
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different
 evolution of cinema
admissions
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 between the two countries. It is observed that US films were the most screened in both
UK
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 and
Australia
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. In the
UK
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, their films were the second most screened movies
while
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Australia
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 screened other movies from different countries.
During
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 1975 to 2005, the
UK
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admissions
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 to cinemas were always greater than the
admissions
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 in
Australia
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 but both increased from 1985 onwards.
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UK
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The UK
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 reached a peak of 170 million
admissions
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 between 2000 and 2005
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Australia
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 did not surpass 100 million
admissions
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, australia, admissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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