Cultural tourism, where people travel in order to visit museums, monuments, and archaeological sites among other things, is a growing industry. Having so many visitors may sometimes benefit a nation’s cultural heritage, but can also cause problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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in a country is for better benefits it
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in forex.
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money helps
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democracy to upgrade our hospitals, schools,
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grants for elders, the disadvantaged and many more. The state
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affords to maintain the system like those museums, monuments, archaeology sites and growing industries.
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learn things about our cultures
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as our dress code, the food we eat, the different languages we speak which are called Bantus, sharing our cultural knowledge and many more stuff.
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makes the community proud and keeps them smart. The other way we
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got to know about their beliefs and culture. Exchanging ideas about our cultural history. Some sightseer apply want to change the mindset of the union by bringing in their different cultures.
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society neglecting its cultural beliefs because of
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influences. As we lose our cultural rights we lose
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unaware, we would not have any attractions our beliefs die just like that. Having visitors
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leads us to have diseases we do not know like the COVID 19 which killed lots of our people and they were no treatment for it. I agree with the statement that states we are at risk of
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coming into our country to visit because others bring in bad influence by trying to change our dress code,
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food we eat. The other negative impact introducing diseases
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as Covid 19 which killed lots of our people because it was a new sickness with no treatment. Our own people losing themselves trying to copy the visitors.
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