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There is certainly a difference in thoughts, ideas and actions between children their parents and grandparent. why do these exist? does it cause problem in yout community, in your opinion?

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Each
generation
 creates new ways of living, making things easier, and children in
this
 21st century,
begin
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 with their career in technology as compared to their
parent
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parents
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 or grandparents,
thus
 it brings a change in their mindset. In the looming paragraphs, I will discuss why these difference arises between them and does it cause an issue for society. To commence with, a significant development has been observed every decade, the living standards of each
generation
 vary to the upcoming
generation
,
due to
 which a big gap in mindset has been observed among
parents
 and their
heir
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.
Moreover
,
parents
 or grandparents push their up-bringings to do hard work, become a bookworm to become successful , but the new
generation
 focuses on smart work because of the advances in technology everything is optimized and it is too difficult for the old
generation
 people to
adapt
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 it as compared to their children.
However
, it is an undeniable fact that the difference in the conceptual levels between each
generation
 is a significant problem. Grandparents or
parents
 know how to give respect to their elders but their children did not understand the value of respect, and feelings.
Thus
, these issues can affect the upcoming society. In a nutshell, each aspect has its pros and cons.
Although
 advancement in lifestyle technology will definitely help each
generation
 to do something extraordinary,
but
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change in lifestyles, brings a huge difference between the new
generation
 and their
parents
. As a matter of fact, they did not value emotions and did not even respect each other.
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