Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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especially
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medical treatment serious check and use the
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consider, is when every
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) to get special medical
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think is the responsibility of the government to provide benefits to the underprivileged. example when many
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special medical
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make
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for
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government to give tools special medical treatment
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hospital
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in
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. in conclusion,
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so important to every
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free
for
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get medical treatment and the government give
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support
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health
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many
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people
in
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. so im strongly agree
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every
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have free
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health
service
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services
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and get
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apply
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new medical
treatments
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