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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
medical
treatments
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its
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 so important
espicially
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especially
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healty
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health
, every
country
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 must have free
health
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service
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. when for medical
treatments
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 is not have all hospital and
this
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 so important and save to certain
desases
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diseases
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people
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i
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 strongly agree
for
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apply
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the
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that
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 every
country
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health
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service
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i
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 will explain more below:
Body paragraph 1
firstly
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, why
i
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agree
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because
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healty
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health
 is more important for more
people
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 and they need medical
treatments
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 special for special
virus
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 or certain pain. example when
i
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accident
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an accident
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 crash and need
serious
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a serious
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 check
to
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on
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 all my body
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to
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 know
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if i
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i
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 have broken bones or
somethings
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something
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 like that.
this
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need
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needs
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 medical treatment serious check and use the
new
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of new
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 medical
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treatments
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treatment
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service
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Body paragraph 2
another point
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 consider, is when every
country
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 have free
health
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service
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 all
people
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when
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who
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 need
to
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apply
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medical
treatments
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 must have
card
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a card
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 KIS (
healty
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health
 card
indonesia
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Indonesia
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) to get special medical
treatments
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, and
i
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 think is the responsibility of the government to provide benefits to the underprivileged. example when many
people
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this
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apply
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special medical
treatments
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 or get
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apply
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medical
treatments
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is
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it
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make
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makes
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 many
people
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 to
health
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 and for expensive
this
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 problem is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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for
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of
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 government to give tools special medical treatment
for
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to
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hospital
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hospitals
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 in
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country
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the country
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.
Conclusion
in conclusion,
the
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apply
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special medical
treatments
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is
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are
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 so important to every
country
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, and the company of hospital can make
its
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it
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 free
for
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to
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 get medical treatment and the government give
the
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apply
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support
for
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to
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health
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the health
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many
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of many
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people
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 in
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country
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the country
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. so im strongly agree
for
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apply
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the
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that
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 every
country
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 have free
healt
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health
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service
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services
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 and get
the
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apply
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new medical
treatments
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic health care
  • free public health service
  • medical treatment
  • latest treatment
  • too expensive
  • save lives
  • see a doctor
  • early treatment
  • hospital bill
  • fall into debt
  • rich and poor
  • fair system
  • public money
  • limited budget
  • emergency care
  • common illness
  • serious disease
  • old people
  • drug company
  • lower the cost
  • make treatment available
  • help a larger number of people
  • to a large extent
  • in my view
  • for example
  • as a result
  • on the one hand
  • on the other hand
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