Some people say that professional workers such as doctors, nurses and teachers who make greater contributions to the society should be paid more than those people in the field of sports and entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe athletics, singers, and actors have less dedication to human

being

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and should not be paid higher

salary

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salaries

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than professions

such

as doctors or teachers. Personally, I think getting

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above celebrities has many merits and

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surpass demerits. Undoubtedly,

higher

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wage

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wages

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will considerably increase the yearning to dedicate

in

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the industry and cause two advantages.

Firstly

, students will consider the job occupations as

stability

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and

attraction

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, so even more of them will join it after

graduate

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. And the circumstance can significantly address the problem existing nowadays – insufficient manpower.

As a result

of

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amount workers joining, medical or educational

staffs

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can take adequate rest and perform even more

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at work.

Secondly

, abundant doctors and teachers participate

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will accelerate

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society to advance. People will rarely suffer from

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illness.

However

,

celebrity

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a celebrity

the celebrity

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who is exaggeratedly famous commonly work substantially hard.

For example

, NBA superstar Kobe Bryant is not only talented but devoted his whole life to basketball. He once said that the reason he can achieve

such

greatness is because he only has eyes for basketball, he even quit university just to play basketball.

Besides

, personages usually need to deal with paparazzi

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and tolerate life without privacy.

Such

as Justin Bieber, he gains

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reputation and wealth, but his marriage is no secret and frequently being discussed by

public

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the public

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. In conclusion, people in the industry of

athletic

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athletics

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and amusement do have their

capability

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and difficulty. But

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exceeded

salary

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to doctors, nurses, and teachers will make great progress in society.

Thus

I think it’s necessary to implement.