The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pictures illustrate the appearance of a particular land

that is

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developed.

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, the changes occurred not only all over the ground but

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reach the sea areas. The island was lost in buildings, yet become more attractive with several constructions that are built,

however

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, there is no tree uprooted. Before the construction, there were only some coconut trees available on the island.

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, after construction, there are fascinating accommodations are built,

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as bungalows that stand in two circles and separated by a receptionist corner.

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, only the left circle is directly connected with the footpath with the receptionist. The corner,

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, connects by vehicle track to the restaurant in front of it.

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, there is a new harbour on the seaside where the ship can land, it can be accessed only from the receptionist's place.

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, there is

also

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a swimming area near the accommodation, and visitors can go there on foot.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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3 paragraphs

155 words

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