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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#year #school #university
Over recent years, there is a growing tendency for high school students
take
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gap
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a gap
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year
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 before
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 to
the
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university
. Some experts think
this
 perfect way to choose
right
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 academic and career path for
teenager
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teenagers
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 whilst other experts worry students waste time and lose educational orientation during the
gap
year
.
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this
 essay will discuss in
details
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 both sides. On the one hand, Many people struggle
opt
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 profession,
although
 they graduated the
university
.
This
 issue
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 related to their high school graduation
year
. Because they applied to the
university
 without any idea of their feature.
Therefore
 some individuals take
year
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 in advance of entering the
university
. Since they have time to try
themselves
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various jobs to find their career path.
Additionally
, during a sabbatical
year
, teenagers gain experience in different areas of
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the job
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 market and they can apply
this
 knowledge during their undergraduate studies.
On the other hand
, some people who see
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affect
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 of a
gap
year
 on teenagers argue that
this
 method is useless and has adverse effects.
For example
,
same
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some
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 students may lose their academic motivation during a sabbatical
year
 after gaining practical skills and realizing they no longer see the need to return to the academic path.
Secondly
, if they do not have a complete plan for their
gap
year
, they may end up wasting expensive time on pointless parts of the internet or engaging in other impractical activities. In conclusion, taking a short break after schooling can be a mixed bag as it has numerous benefits
such
 as trying different job areas and gaining experience, but the drawbacks can not be ignored.
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