The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph is an illustration of the
number
of shop
closings
and openings in a single country over a 7-year period between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
, the
number
of
shops
that opened and the
number
that closed saw a huge fluctuation throughout the whole year.
In addition
, the
number
of closures
shops
went down significantly in the middle of the period. In terms of the
number
of
closings
, which stood at over 6000 in 2011,
then
followed by a slight change until 2013, the
number
of closing
shops
reached a peak of 7000 in 2013.
Moreover
, it dropped to the lowest rate of them and increased dramatically from about 5000 which stood remained the same from 2016 to 2018. The
number
of openings began at a higher level rather than that of closure
shops
, amounting to nearly 9000. In 2012, there was a plunge in the
number
of
closings
. People closed their
shops
about 6000, which went almost the same as the
number
of
closings
. After a fluctuation in the
number
of closures, there was a decline which changed from 4000 in 2017 to 3000 in 2018.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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