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In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

#future #people #holidays #country #travel #holiday
Actually,life is
beautifiul
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beautiful
 with
it's
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its
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 opportunities.But sometimes
people
doesn'
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don't
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t
 be happy in different situations and it
mades
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makes
they
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their
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 life
stresfull
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stressful
 and they met
difficulties
 in solving their problems. In my opinion,we have a lot of ways of escaping
stress
 and
difficulties
.
For example
,some
people
 find
hobby
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a hobby
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,like reading with lovely
thinks
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things
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 etc.It's a
variban
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variety
 of
the
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people
,
changes
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 in taste.Some
people
escaping
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escape
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 their
stress
with
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by
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 reading
interesting
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an interesting
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 and advanced
book
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books
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,because when they
reading
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read
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 they
learning
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learn
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something ,or
theyfool
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they fool
the fool
as
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like
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a
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the
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 main hero of
story
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the story
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.It can
feeling
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feel
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 happy.Other
people
 like
extreme
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an extreme
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 sport,because extreme sport is
more
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apply
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adrenaliner
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adrenaline
adrenalin
.Adrenalin is chemical content and it helps for producing serotonin,that why
people
 with serotonin being happy and
stress
 left
they
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their
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body
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. What about
difficulties
.
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?
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Difficulties
 could be like low
incrime
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in crime
income
 money,
in
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apply
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 family relations
in
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from
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study
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a study
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 perspective or some
people
 can'
t
 find
dream
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a dream
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 job
and
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etc.When
people
low
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have low
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 income they can'
t
 buy whatever they want.They can'
t
 travel as normally and
quality
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in quality
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.For escaping
thout
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through
difficult
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difficulties
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people
 must work more,
find
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and find
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second
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a second
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 job.
Other
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In other
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 situation ,in family relations men or women can'
t
 understand each other or children
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want
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wants
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towants
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 see their parents as
like
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they want ,but
people
 are different ,nobody
wants
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towants
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 be like other wants. Some
people
 reduce their
stress
 and
difficult
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difficulty
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 with wearing in their gardens.Flowers,trees,
birds
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and birds
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, is keeping
people
 silent,feel
itself
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apply
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as
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like
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baby
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babies
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,
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and likvidade
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likvidade
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liquidate
the
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apply
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stress
. In conclusion,l would say that:if you have
stress
 and
difficulties
 nobody can'
t
 help you as you .You stopped it in your brain.The brain must accept all as it has ,
the
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apply
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people
 can win on
stress
 and find ways for solving their problems,because at that time all the
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difficulties
diffuculties
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difficulties
seems
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seem
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obvious
obvios
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obvious
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