The diagram details the process of making wool. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram details the process of making wool. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram shows how to make
wool
for consumer products.
Overall
, it can be seen that there are fourteen steps, beginning with collecting the raw materials and the end with finished consumer products.
Firstly
,
wool
is obtained from sheep. The sheep is shared (cut the
wool
off). After that, the
wool
is cleaned and sent to the dryer to dry it.
Next,
the
wool
transferred
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into a machine to spin it. In
this
process, it can transform into two different types which are string and
wool
. For string, if it can't be used, it's going to the recycling process.
On the other hand
, people combined
wool
together into multiple tufts of
wool
and keep it inside the store. After that, there are made into balls, called balls of yarn. People used these yarns for knitting and producing various products
such
as carpets and jackets.
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