IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

IELTS Academic Writing Task 1

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
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The two line graphs illustrate the percentage of people in one country owning 3 different electrical appliances
while
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comparing the number of weekly
hours
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dedicated to housework between the years 1920 and 2019.
Overall
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, the ownership of electric devices tends to increase over the years
while
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the
hours
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people dedicate to clean households decrease. It can be seen that the main trend is the general raise of electrical tools.
However
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, the one that quickly raised was the refrigerator owned only by
a
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apply
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10% of the population in 1920 and sharply reached 100% in 1980. There was a similar growth with the vacuum cleaner
where
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which
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in 1920 had a 40% of owners and peaked at 100% in the year 2000. The
last
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gadget is the washing machine
that
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which
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over the years, has increased
around
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by around
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40% reaching the 70% of citizens in 2019.
On the other hand
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, the graph that shows the
hours
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per week dedicated to cleaning the house has gradually decreased.
It is clear that
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in 1920 citizens were dedicating more
hours
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to housework reaching an average of 50
hours
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per week. Compared to the year 1960, housework dropped to 20 weekly
hours
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and gradually decreased to 10
hours
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per week in 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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