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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first pie chart illustrates the usage of
energy
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 in Australian households
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 the second pie chart illustrates how
greenhouse
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 gases are emitted from the usage of
this
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energy
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.
Overall
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, heating is the main
energy
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use
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 in Australian households
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water
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 heating plays a major part in
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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. 42% of
energy
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use
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 comes from heating followed by
water
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 heating with 30%.
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, cooling is the least
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 in
energy
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use
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 as it only has 2% in consumption. Refrigeration and lighting are
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 considered low in percentage with 7% and 4% respectively.
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 other appliances only account for 15% which is halved of
water
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 heating’s percentage. In terms of
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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, the majority of the emission comes from
water
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 heating with 32%
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 heating only accounts for 15%. Other appliances, even though, have 15% of the
energy
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use
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, they account for 28% of
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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 which is the second highest in the chart.
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, cooling and lighting don’t emit many
greenhouse
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 gases as cooling only accounts for 3% and 8% for lighting. Cooling and lighting indicate a lower percentage of
energy
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use
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 leads to a lower rate of
greenhouse
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gas
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emissions
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, greenhouse, use, water, gas, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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