Write about the following topic: In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, while in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In recent years,
children
has
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attracted the general public's attention. There are some country believe that
children
must have strict
rules
of behaviour,
while
in
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other
country
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countries
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say that
the
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children
can do anything they want.
This
essay will give some
informs
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to support both views. On the one hand, there are many
children
do
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who do
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not want to do some things, which are thought of
adults
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as adults
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.
Firstly
, some
children
are arranging their
time
by themselves,
for example
, they can
choosea
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choose
choose a
a
time
for playing games or hanging with friends before they are doing homework.
Secondly
, some
children
want to eat fast food
instead
they are having dinner at home with their family, they can decide what, where or when they want to eat.
Finally
,
sometime
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sometimes
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the
rules
for
children
's behaviour are unimportant in our life,
people
do not care what are they doing? or whether are they
a
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kind
people
or not as they do not need any
rules
in their life, they do not
to
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need
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say thank when they are getting
somethings
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something
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from adult
people
; some
people
say that do not
need
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punish the
children
since they are
child
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a child
the child
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.
On the other hand
, some countries must have
rules
for
children
. One important of that the
children
must have
rules
of
time
,
for example
, when they must wake up, when will they must have breakfast, or when will they can go out for playing soccer... it is very important to your life because when they are following like
this
rules
they can manage their
time
and their health. On top of that, when
children
have strict
rules
, it is very good for them in the future,
for example
, all
people
will like they are working with a person have
rules
, they exactly about
time
they will finish the deadline in the work. In conclusion, from what I give above, I believe that all
people
will have different ways to
teachchildren
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teach children
.
Therefore
, the government should have
further
consideration for
this
issue.
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