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In several parts of the world, there is currently a lack of students choosing to study science in universities and colleges. What is the causes? And what will be the effects on society?

#parts #world #lack #students #study #science #universities #colleges #effects #society
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In most parts of the
world
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, there are rare pupils choosing to
study
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 science in
universities
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 and colleges. What are the reasons? And what will be the effects on society? Nowadays in most parts of the
world
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, educated
students
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 from
universities
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 are unemployed especially, at high levels
such
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 as MS, Ph.D.
On the other hand
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, most of the well-known companies in the
world
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 invite younger to participate in online courses and after that are employed by that company after the evaluation program. Some of the companies do not look at the University of
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 for hiring personnel they are searching for what project you did and what you can do for their company. Based on these reasons
students
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 do not encourage to
study
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 high-level
education
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 at
universities
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.
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 needs of society for some job
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 as piping, nursing, … cause good job offer with acceptable salaries proving that there is no definite link between
study
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 and income.
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,
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of
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 society for well-educated people leads
universities
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 to find a suitable solution for encouraging
students
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 to
study
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in
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high-level
education
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. To achieve
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 goal
universities
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 should have good relationships with industries to have economic support for
students
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 and
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 professors define related projects based on the needs of companies. By
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 method,
students
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 can be hired by the company where they do their
project
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 during their time of
education
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. In conclusion,
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the
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pupils in the
world
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 do not encourage to
study
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 at a high level of
education
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,
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this
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 would be solved with a small change in the university by a respectable relationship with industries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lack of interest
  • Perception
  • Career paths
  • Technological development
  • Skilled professionals
  • Foreign expertise
  • Innovation
  • Economic impacts
  • Scientific advancements
  • Higher education
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