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Many university students want to learn about different subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others feel it is important to give all their time and attention to studying for their qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people in the world believe that
students
 can learn about other
subjects
 and
skills
 even have their first
subjects
. Personally, I believe that
students
 have the right for studying multi
subjects
 plus their main one, I feel
this
 way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay. I firmly believe that, nowadays a wide range of
students
 looking for studying at university have many goals and
subjects
 they want to achieve
in addition
 to their main
subjects
.
Furthermore
, many undergraduate
students
 are studying different
skills
 like programmatic and graphic design even those that do not suited to their specialities in the university.
For instance
, my brother studies physics at uni and his schedules have many gaps,
instead
 of doing nothing he starts in his free time learning new
skills
,
such
 as programmatic using, C++ and javascript, just the basics.
Hence
, he told me
that is
 really suitable for my university course and there is no effect .
As a consequence
, in the new ,era there are a lot of families persuading their children to focus only on their
subjects
due to
 lack of concentration, many articles nowadays discuss that
students
 lose their attention if studying different courses
instead
 of having the main
subjects
.
Moreover
, most
students
' points decreased with bad results in the final exams, because they studied multiple courses or did other things at the same time.
For example
, my sister
last
 year she failed their exams because she was learnt new
skills
instead
 of focusing on her course. In conclusion,
personally
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students
 can study multi
subjects
 even if they have their main course, Because, whole
students
 if organise their time perfectly they can balance all their different
subjects
, I strongly believe
that is
 supporting my point of view.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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