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Because of the covid epidemic, many people prefer to work or study from home instead of going to their workplace or university What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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improvement has made great progress from the past to the present day.
Nevertheless
, statistics show that
population's
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 interest in discipline is increasing rapidly every year. It is true that culture means a lot in our modern world.
In addition
,today, the increasing demand for learning
due to
 globalization emphasizes its importance.
Although
this
 matter of literacy is important for some
family
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, it is not important for others, it is left to their personal opinion. The problem with our modern scholarship is still those who think negatively about schooling. On the
one
 hand, schooling is beneficial for children, but
also
 for humanity.
Moreover
, as some argue, the thoughts of
population
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 living in remote parts of the world prove that information is not important.
One
 of the main reasons for
this
 is,
for example
, a different way of thinking and a different outlook. If the
labor
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 capacity of mankind increases, the development potential will
also
 increase. On the
one
 hand ... it's good for children and humanity.
Moreover
, as some argue, the thoughts of people living in remote parts of the world prove that ... is not important.
One
 of the main reasons for
this
 is,
for example
, a different way of thinking and a different outlook. If the labour capacity of humanity increases, the development potential will
also
 increase
On the other hand
, I agree that we have several options in terms of alternatives because I believe that ... is not only interesting for me but for everyone. A short experience shows that if we study about ..., we should shed light on the path of adults and children with what we learn. In conclusion, it is confirmed once again that ... is a useful alternative for the development of the nation.
In addition
, it is recommended to classify different types of ... and it is important for association.
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