Many claim that the fast food industry had a negative effect on the environment, eating habits, and families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, individuals are preoccupied with their busy work and

therefore

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do not have time to prepare meals, tending to consume fast

food

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. Many people believe that

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negatively impacts our environment,

health

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, and family relationships. I firmly agree with

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notion and will

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reasons with different perspectives.

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with, the packaging of fast

food

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is not eco-friendly and has

adverse

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an adverse

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impact on the environment. Considering KFC and

McDonalds’

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Mcdonald’s

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, two of the biggest fast-

food

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chain stores

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, all cutleries provided in the restaurant are nonreusable including paper and plastic which are acquired from the logging of trees and extraction of oil respectively.

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, people prefer ordering fast

food

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takeaway because of their hectic schedule, and

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requires a lot of disposable containers, sending a lot of trash to the landfill. These non-renewable materials

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as plastic take hundreds of years to decompose and create pressure on the capacity of the landfill.

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, fast

food

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has completely changed the eating habits of modern people, harming their

health

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and family bonding.

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unhealthy alternative has

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increased

popularity

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in popularity

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over the years because of its deliciousness and convenience to get comparing to traditional homemade

meal

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meals

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, the rich

flavor

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flavour

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of fast

food

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apply

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actually came from a

serious

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series

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of seasoning and processing. It is no doubt that

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junk

food

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contains excessive

amount

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amounts

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of sugar and situated fat which affect our

health

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detrimentally as they increase the risks of suffering from chronic diseases,

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, high blood pressure, diabetes and stroke in

long

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term.

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, fast

food

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also

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has a substantial impact in terms of family relationships as it leads to a decline in family time and communication. As fast

food

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is convenient to eat

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its

well

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good

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packaging,

family

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a family

the family

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member

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members

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may eat separately

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the sofa or

their

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in their

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own rooms

instead

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of sitting down together at a table.

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greatly increases

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apply

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individualism and harms relationships among family members. In conclusion, it is apparent that fast

food

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consumption has created problems no matter in a diverse

perspective

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perspectives

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, the government should involve more regarding the promotion

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of health

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health

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healthy

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food

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and

exercising

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exercise

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in order to mitigate the detrimental outcomes brought by fast

food

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consumption.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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