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Fossil fuel is the main source of energy. In some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy is encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Fossil fuel has been used by humankind as the source of chief
energy
 for
fundred
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hundred
 years, but it
considered
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 as
non renewable
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non-renewable
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resources
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resource
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, which
mean
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 that one day their reserve will deplete
due to
persistence
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 exploration to meet human daily needs in various activities.
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 some
drawback
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drawbacks
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 regarding
to
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usage of fossil
fuel
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fuels
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.
First,
as a
non renewable
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non-renewable
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 resources, human perpetual exploitation to
fulfill
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energy
 needs, mainly in machine combustion like
car
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cars
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,
airplane
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airplanes
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, and
plant
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plants
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 will lead to the depletion
this
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of this
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 kind of
energy
.
Secondly
, they
emita
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emit a
emit
pollutant
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pollutants
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 that
jeopardize
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 human health and cause
illness
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illnesses
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 like cough, cancer and
respiratory
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the respiratory
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 system.
Finally
, it endangers
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer having
function
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a function
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 to protect
earth
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the earth
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 from ultraviolet radiation and in some
case
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cases
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 lead to global warming in some
part
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parts
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 of the world. In 1998,
energy
 consumption in the
transport
 sector was to blame for 28% of emissions of CO2 the leading greenhouse gas.
According to
 the latest estimates, if nothing is done to reverse the traffic growth trend, CO2 emissions from
transport
 can be expected to increase by around 50% to 1,113 billion tonnes by 2020 compared with the 739 billion tonnes recorded in 1990. Once again, road
transport
 is the main culprit since it alone accounts for 84% of the CO2 emissions attributable to
transport
. Using alternative fuels and improving
energy
 efficiency is
thus
 both an ecological necessity and a technological challenge. Paying attention to
this
 condition, some countries encourage the
using
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use
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 of alternative sources of
energy
 that can be regarded
safe
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as safe
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to
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for
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 our planet, like geothermal, solar, and wind.
This
energy
 category
not
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is not
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 only
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly
,
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 but much more sustainable in the long run because
its
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of its
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avalaibility
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availability
by
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to
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 natural
condition
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conditions
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in
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on
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 our planet and universe. But implementing
this
 idea will not
easy
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be easy
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 because it takes much more time and high cost to research and to convert become
energy
 we need in daily life.
May be
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 it
much
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is much
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 more easier
conducted
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to conduct
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 in
wealth
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wealthy
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country
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countries
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 like
USA
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the USA
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,
UK
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the UK
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, Germany, France and Japan with their cutting-edge technology, but it will be a problem in developing countries either
due to
 their economic condition or
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the avalaibility
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avalaibility
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availability
 of human resources. In conclusion, alternative sources of
energy
 is a good idea to be implemented because
of
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apply
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its advantage, mainly does not generate pollution so
it
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they
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 will safe for our ecosystem and much more sustainable as well in the long run, but it has
major
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a major
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 disadvantage
due to
costly
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costs
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 related to research and time-consuming to realize the notion.
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