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solar energy is becoming more and more popular source of energy in many countries. why is this? what are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy?

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Nowadays most of the countries produce
energy
 for
electricity
 usage by solars
due to
 inadequate availability of water
sourceAlthough
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source although
this
 trend has certain upsides and downsides.
This
 essay will discuss both with examples. Today, with the
existing
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 of technology, nations can manufacture tons of
electricity
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energy
 within a minute by the natural sun system. It is
very
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eco friendly
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 and less pollution method to implement
energy
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 system.
Moreover
, other methods consider
to produce
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electricity
 by using water resources. As
ar
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 result, many lakes rivers and waterfalls can deteriorate and
it's increase
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it increases
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 the global temperature tremendously. In some countries, many people invest
on
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such
 solar
plantation
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plantations
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therefore
 they can simply earn or get profit by setting these in their own home yards.
On the other hand
 ,several drawbacks associated with
solar
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the solar
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 system are clear. One of them is,
cost
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the cost
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 of installation is higher comparatively other
energy
 sources.
Moreover
, mostly it's
depend
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depends
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 on the climate ,If it is a rainy day or winter season ,unable to produce because
of
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the main source of
this
 production is
sun
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the sun
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.
Consequently
the
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less production will
effect
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affect
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whole
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the whole
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country
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country's
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energy
 supply.
Finally
, most of the empty spaces of a country
allocated
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 or dominated to set solar implantation.
Therefore
 many deprived people
loss
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necessary
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the necessary
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 liberty
of
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to
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 construct
building
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buildings
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 for their shelters.
Although
 all these disadvantages
acknowledged
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, in most cases advantages
outweighed
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are outweighed
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by
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the benefits of
natural
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eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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electricity
 establishment. In conclusion, natural implantation has enormous advantages because
it's
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reduce
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reduces
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enevironmemtal
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environmental
 pollution and global warming.
Although
 it's
very
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 expensive method and maintaining cost
also
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is also
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 higher. I still believe the benefits of
this
 trend
far
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are far
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 more significant than the detriments.
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