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The chart below gives attendance figures for Grandville Stadium from 2017, which are projected through 2030 after a major improvement project. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives attendance figures for Grandville Stadium from 2017, which are projected through 2030 after a major improvement project. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph is presenting information about the
number
 of attendances who have taken part in three types of
events
 from years 2017 to 2030 in the Grandville Stadium. An increase in
number of
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attendance can be seen in all event types which is considered
from
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by looking at the
number
 of
people
 who have gone to
stadium
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the stadium
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. The most increase belongs to concert
attendaces
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attendance
attendances
attendees
, there were about 25'000
people
 taking part in concerts in 2017
while
 it reached
to
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125'000 in 2030. The
number
 of
people
 going to
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the theater
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theater
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 does
had
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 a raise and
have
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has
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 become 5 times larger than before. In 2017, the average
number
 of
theater
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theatre
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 watchers was about 10'000
people
,
however
, it is
near
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 50'000
people
 by 2030. Sporting
events
 had the least change in the
number
 of
people
 in comparison to other
events
 but it contains the largest
number
 of
attendaces
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attendees
attendances
 during these years. The
number
 of
people
 who have gone for watching a
sport
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 match in 2017 is about 150'000 which has reached
to
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160'000
people
 by 2030. It
haven't
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 changed significantly but no other
events
 have got
attendances
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 as much as
sport
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sports
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events
.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, events, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attendance figures
  • projected
  • improvement project
  • major enhancement
  • trend
  • time span
  • analyze
  • decrease
  • stagnation
  • growth
  • critical increase
  • forecast
  • overview
  • comparison
  • anticipated
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