Why do you some people prefer to live in big cities ?

In today's
world
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more and more
people
want to live in major
cities
.City living can have many positive impacts which
causes
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a high rate
ov
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of
migration from rural to urban areas.There are ample
of
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benefits to
live
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living
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in developed
cities
.First of all,why
individual
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individuals
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prefer to live in
metropolis
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the metropolis
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is great job opportunities of employment as there are several
industrial
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available.There are plenty of job opportunities awaiting you in big
cities
than there are in a village or countryside that you can take part in.
Furthermore
,
for
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more
people
earning enough to
acheive
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achieve
their
fainancial
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financial
goals is the biggest concern,
major
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and major
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cities
make
this
possible.
For instance
,in Iran,better
job
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jobs
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attract dwellers towards improved
cities
like Tehran and Isfahan.
secondly
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,more
overall
facilities are available in big
cities
such
as better infrastructure,high level of education,good means of transport,multiple housing options and upmarket shops. Despite the fact that
people
living in large
cities
enjoy a lot of facilities,they face many problems.Multiple problems
occuring
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occurring
at
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in
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big
cities
include
trafic
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traffic
congestion,street crime,lack of natural
enviroment
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environment
,air pollution and noise pollution,but I think the biggest issue with living in major
cities
is air pollution.
The surface
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transportation is the main source
od
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of
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greenhouse gas
emissons
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emissions
,which causes respiratory
problem
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problems
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to
the
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people
.
This
problem is
exacerated
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exacerbated
by the sheer number of
Vehicles
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vehicles
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commuting daily in
city
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the city
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.
Consequently
,there are
variety
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a variety
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of advantages and disadvantages to city life,
people
tend to choose
cities
to live in and it is estimated that in future more world's population will live in big
cities
.
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