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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#country #language
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 important thing to communicate with each other, but when you use a foreign
language
 for communication with other
people
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 it can
causes
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serious
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the serious
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 social
problem
 and
also
practical
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problem
. I
also
 agree
in
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 that given statement and I will describe my own view in that paragraph. To
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, When you go to communicate with local
people
 you need to
be
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understand
to
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their native speech.
Additionally
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 it's very hard to understand their culture and feeling.
for
example
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 you want to spend some time with local
people
 and you want to know about the area you're having some problems with.
Likewise
, if you have some
issue
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 with yourself it will be very hard to explain them.
In addition
, when you go to your job sector on their you
having
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 some
problem
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for
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 your native
language
. In
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, sometimes you need to know about some information related
your
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 work it will be very
hurt
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 for you for solving that
problem
.
Further more
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,
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you went to
cooked
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 some food for
you
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 but you don't know the recipe
on
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 the time it will be very hard for you to understand
to
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the recipe if you don't know their native
language
.
Consequently
,When you go to live
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other place
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 you need to learn
the
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native speech
otherwise
 you have been
problem
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a problem
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 with communication with local
people
. Two
sum
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 up,
Local
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language
 is
best
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 thing to speak with local
people
, So you have to speak with their native
speech
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.
Additionally
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 you
having
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 a several
difficulty
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difficulties
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 for your surviving
to
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 the place.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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