Doctor encourage older people to take regular exercise, but there are few of them taking enough physical exercise. What are the causes and what solutions could be taken to solve the problem?
In recent years, many
doctor
begin to suggest older Change to a plural noun
doctors
people
to take regular exercise
. Because it is good for their health and it will be help
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help
recovery
their body’s energy. But there are few Replace the word
recover
of
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apply
the
older Correct article usage
apply
people
agree
and completely Correct pronoun usage
who agree
this
advice
. Most of the older people
ignores
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ignore
this
advice
. Therefore
there are two types of older people
in our society, one of the people
who have
take Add the particle
tohave
exercise
every day and another reject this
advice
laying down every day.
From the the
one of the old Remove the redundancy
apply
people
feedback, they have
get Add the particle
tohave
bonus
from the take regular Add an article
a bonus
the bonus
exercise
everyday
. Most older Replace the word
every day
people
have a high blood pressure illness
long terms
, and a part of the older Fix the agreement mistake
term
people
have a high sugar level illness
. But when they complete daily regular training and keeping long term. The all
of the Correct article usage
All
illness
can Fix the agreement mistake
illnesses
controlled
by Add a missing verb
be controlled
exercise
not only from medication. For example
, that is
a real story from my father. He has 63 years old. And he has basic
high blood pressure long time. Add a missing verb
had basic
Moreover
he afraid
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was afraid
relying
on the medication, so he decided to try Change preposition
of relying
ran
a Change the verb form
to run
5 kilometer
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5-kilometer
everyday
. After Replace the word
every day
a years
, he Correct the article-noun agreement
a year
years
get
a normal blood pressure like healthy Change the verb form
gets
people
. This
is his get bonus from exercise
.
Actually, another
older Correct quantifier usage
other
people
they
just keep old traditions. China has a famous sentence:’Correct pronoun usage
apply
less
Correct your spelling
Less
more
Correct quantifier usage
apply
exercise
and more laying in the
bed will Correct article usage
apply
good
for Add a missing verb
be good
you
healthy’. But from modern science identify, Correct pronoun usage
your
people
keep a regular exercise
everyday
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every day
sometime
can solve Replace the word
sometimes
you
lot of the Change the pronoun
your
illness
. Therefore
, in my opinion
I suggest to Add a comma
,opinion
the
some media creators to make much more Remove the article
apply
exercise
knowledge for the
older Correct article usage
apply
people
. Honestly, more and more people
believe the new media information better than professional doctor
. Fix the agreement mistake
doctors
That is
useful advice
to solve the problem from my experience.
Finally
, i
force Change the capitalization
I
recommend
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to recommend
the
older Correct your spelling
that
people
can accept and try to take some exercises.Submitted by crystal1989.liu on
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