Doctor encourage older people to take regular exercise, but there are few of them taking enough physical exercise. What are the causes and what solutions could be taken to solve the problem?

In recent years, many
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begin to suggest older
people
to take regular
exercise
. Because it is good for their health and it will
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recovery
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their body’s energy. But there are few
of
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older
people
agree
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and completely
this
advice
. Most of the older
people
ignores
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this
advice
.
Therefore
there are two types of older
people
in our society, one of the
people
who
have
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take
exercise
every day and another reject
this
advice
laying down every day. From the
the
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one of the old
people
feedback, they
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get
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from the take regular
exercise
everyday
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. Most older
people
have a high blood pressure
illness
long
terms
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, and a part of the older
people
have a high sugar level
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. But when they complete daily regular training and keeping long term.
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of the
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can
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by
exercise
not only from medication.
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,
that is
a real story from my father. He has 63 years old. And he has
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high blood pressure long time.
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he
afraid
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relying
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of relying
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on the medication, so he decided to try
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a
5 kilometer
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everyday
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. After
a years
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a year
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, he
get
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a normal blood pressure like healthy
people
.
This
is his get bonus from
exercise
. Actually,
another
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older
people
they
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just keep old traditions. China has a famous sentence:’
less
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more
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apply
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exercise
and more laying in
the
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bed will
good
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be good
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for
you
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healthy’. But from modern science identify,
people
keep a regular
exercise
everyday
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sometime
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can solve
you
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lot of the
illness
.
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, in my
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I suggest to
the
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some media creators to make much more
exercise
knowledge for
the
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older
people
. Honestly, more and more
people
believe the new media information better than professional
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doctors
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.
That is
useful
advice
to solve the problem from my experience.
Finally
,
i
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force
recommend
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the
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that
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older
people
can accept and try to take some exercises.
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