Some people think young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others think thau5t they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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traditions
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time. Despite of change some
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that young
people
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because of changing
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life style
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and new
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technology
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each person should
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life
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their heart'
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contact
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Firstly
, I want to look from the
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individual's
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some
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want to protect the
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because they consider that these
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memories from old times.
Secondly
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the time
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a lot
of
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are changing with modern behaviours. And if these changes give the
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easy life,
than
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then
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they change the
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and create new ones.
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why
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, I agree that young
people
must be free from most of the
traditions
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on them if they want to follow the
traditions
or not.
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, from my
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perspective
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mostly
old
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the old
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generations want to young ones
follow
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the
traditions
, but in my
throuhgts
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thoughts
youngs
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young
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must follow their own
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instincts
insticts
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instincts
and make decisions for
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themselves
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themselves
, if they want to follow the
traditions
or make a change,
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