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Some people think young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others think thau5t they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
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 of
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the
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traditions
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 are changing over
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time. Despite of change some
people
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 that young
people
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 should follow the old
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, but in another hand some
people
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. In my
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 because of changing
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life style
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lifestyle
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 and new
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technology
technlogy
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 each person should
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life
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as
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in
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contact
content
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Firstly
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, I want to look from the
indivuduals'
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individual's
individuals
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side
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 some
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 because they consider that these
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memories from old times.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, In changing
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the time
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a lot
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 are changing with modern behaviours. And if these changes give the
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more
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a more
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 easy life,
than
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then
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 they change the
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why
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, I agree that young
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 on them if they want to follow the
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 or not.
Conclusion
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result
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, from my
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perspective
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perspective
 mostly
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the old
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 generations want to young ones
follow
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to follow
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 the
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, but in my
throuhgts
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thoughts
youngs
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young
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 must follow their own
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instincts
insticts
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instincts
 and make decisions for
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themselves
themselvies
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themselves
, if they want to follow the
traditions
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 or make a change,

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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