Some people think that dangerous sport should be banned while others believe that people should be free to choose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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sports
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was developed since the ancient era and people
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conservative until
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era which included some number of some
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which risked
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player injury. But in my
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we should contain and conserve these for a
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essay. It is important to maintain dangerous
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as football, boxing and etc. because of many advantages.
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most risk spots are the favourite
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that provided amazing feeling and involved that activity to them as they stand at the side of the stadium.
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in terms of culture, a
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developed unique
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by themself for a long time.
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those included many of
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as boxing because it can give watcher satisfy
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watching them. And currently many
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unique
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that risk
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physical damage to players from a
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of countries
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and very famous around
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world
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. Thirthy thing is human like any competition activity and shows everyone
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am strongest in
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location. So that
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we can not remove risky
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from our
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and we will find many
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injured
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after finishing
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competition like that nowadays. In ,conclusion the
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in modern has many
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and a
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of them are able to have
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strongly agree to maintain all of them because these are evident to prove human have a beautiful culture which
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a long time
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presents humanity still have ancient treasure to show everyone and not the same as an animal.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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