The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The bar graph illustrates how many
billions
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habitants from 10 different countries spend on travelling in 2014.
Overall
, the
fisrt
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first
one
on
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the top 10 that destinated more money on travel that year was China. Going more into detail, Chinese people spend around 110
billion
dollars in 2014 on travelling
porpuses
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,
however
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the rest of the
Asians
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countries were at the bottom list with an average of 16
billion
that year. Singapore had an average of 24
billion
dolars
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dollars
on travel expenses,
after
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Singapore and
Southkorea
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South Korea
with 20
billion
and India,
Malasyia
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Malaysia
,
Taiwan
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and Taiwan
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only spend an average of 15
billion
in 2014.
On the other hand
,
United
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the United
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States and Germany destinated the same amount of capital on
travels
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, with an
aproximation
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approximation
of 86
billion
each so both of them were
on
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the second and third position. Right after there is the British population, which
costumers
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customers
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dedicated around 54
billion
dollars
on
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travelling that same year.
To conclude
, the image lists the ranking of the top 10 countries that dedicated more money
on
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travel activities and
it is clear that
China peaks
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top of the list.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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