The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the carts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the carts show how it was distributed.
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The charts comprehensively show the
police
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budget
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in
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UK
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the UK
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through
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and pie
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. The table reveals the origin of
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UK’s
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the UK’s
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police
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account from 2017 to 2018,
while
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the pie charts provide insights
about
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budget
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allocation
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in
UK
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Police
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institution
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institutions
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over
two-year
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period between 2017 and 2018. It is evident from the table that the
budget
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from National Government and Local Taxes experienced
the
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significant increase,
while
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the other resources
was
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leveling
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out over the period shown.
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, the biggest
budget
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allocation
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in
UK
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police
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institution
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institutions
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goes to salaries. For comparison, technology accounted for the lowest percentage
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throughout the given period. In 2017, 175,5m of
Britain
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police
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budget
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came from National Government, the quantity soared slightly to 177,8m.
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, Local taxes
recorded
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to contribute 91,2m to the
UK
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police
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account in 2017. In the following year, the quantity soared dramatically to 102,3m. In comparison, 38m
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provided by other sources to
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UK
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the UK
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Police
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budget
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,
this
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are
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stabilize
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to
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the next year.
Three-fourth
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of
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budget
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was allocated to salaries in 2017
,
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and
then
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dropped slightly to 69% in 2018.
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, the amount of
budget
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allocation
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for technology was 8% in 2017 and inclined to 14% in the following year. Money
allocation
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for Building and transport experienced the same amount in 2017 and 2018 which
were
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17%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, uk, allocation, m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "soared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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