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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the carts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the carts show how it was distributed.
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The charts comprehensively show the
police
budget
 in
UK
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the UK
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 through
table
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tables
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 and pie
chart
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charts
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. The table reveals the origin of
UK’s
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the UK’s
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police
 account from 2017 to 2018,
while
 the pie charts provide insights
about
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into
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budget
allocation
 in
UK
Police
institution
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institutions
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 over
two-year
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a two-year
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 period between 2017 and 2018. It is evident from the table that the
budget
 from National Government and Local Taxes experienced
the
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a
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 significant increase,
while
 the other resources
was
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leveling
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levelling
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 out over the period shown.
Overall
, the biggest
budget
allocation
 in
UK
police
institution
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institutions
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 goes to salaries. For comparison, technology accounted for the lowest percentage
allocation
 throughout the given period. In 2017, 175,5m of
Britain
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Britain's
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police
budget
 came from National Government, the quantity soared slightly to 177,8m.
On the other hand
, Local taxes
recorded
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were recorded
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 to contribute 91,2m to the
UK
police
 account in 2017. In the following year, the quantity soared dramatically to 102,3m. In comparison, 38m
are
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is
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 provided by other sources to
UK
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the UK
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Police
budget
,
this
 figure
are
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is
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stabilize
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stabilised
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to
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for
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 the next year.
Three-fourth
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Three-fourths
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 of
budget
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the budget
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 was allocated to salaries in 2017
,
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apply
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 and
then
 dropped slightly to 69% in 2018.
In contrast
, the amount of
budget
allocation
 for technology was 8% in 2017 and inclined to 14% in the following year. Money
allocation
 for Building and transport experienced the same amount in 2017 and 2018 which
were
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was
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 17%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, uk, allocation, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "soared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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