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It is believed that developed countries should solve the climate change, while others believe that it is developing countries that should dealth with this opinion. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

#countries #climate #change #dealth
No one can deny the change in the climate.
Rich
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country
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countries
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 should take
initiative
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 to reduce the effect of
this
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 changes.
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 it
is depend
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 on the
behavior
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 of developing countries.
Firstly
, just because of achieving
thier
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their
 target
develop
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 countries did too much
of
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dangerous
productivities
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, which cause more production of carbon and other dangerous gases.
Like more
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 production in the factory can produce more harmful gases.
Secondly
 comfort level of lifestyle
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 responsible for
this
 effect.
For
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 living without
air-condition
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is
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 cars,
house
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 is hard for them. Ultimately that causes changes in
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 term.
While
 in
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 hand, developing nations have failed to maintain natural resources intake to show
thier
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their
 position in the world. E.g. In
country
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countries
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 like India natural
source
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 of water
reduced
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are reduced
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 just because of
heat
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the heat
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 of global warming. Cutting
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 the tree is
also
 one of
themajor
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the major
reason
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reasons
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 for changes. It proved that
tree
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trees
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 produce oxygen against Carbon dioxide. In a nation like
Bangladesh
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 they have cut the forest and converted that to industries. In my point of
view
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 it is equal responsibility
on
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 both developed and developing
country
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countries
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. Plant more
tree
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trees
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,
stop
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 tempering with natural resources can be done by all of them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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