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Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Giving
homework
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 to
children
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 is always a debatable issue as some minds claim that
homework
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 should be given to
children
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 every day for success in school
whereas
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 others claim that there should not be a
such
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 thing for the successful at school. I personally agree with the latter notion.
To begin
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 with, getting
homework
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 daily will affect the
children
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's social life as they will not have enough
time
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 to spend with their friends. to be more specific, they will spend their whole
time
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 on their
homework
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 and won't have spare
time
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 to play with their friends.
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, it may affect their growth and development as they will take it as a burden. By
this
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, first in school and
then
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 at home doing
homework
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 they will feel tired and stressed which can impact negatively on their physical and mental health that lead to many diseases.
For example
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, as per the survey, it is claimed that 70% of students are facing physical and mental health issues owing to the burden of
homework
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.
Therefore
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, there should not be any
homework
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 given to students. Moving to the other side
where
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apply
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people claim
homework
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 should be given and believe that pupils should get schoolwork daily as it will enhance their learning for success in the classroom. When they
will
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do their
homework
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, they will retain those topics longer
time
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 which will increase their grade.
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, learners will be more disciplined as they will do their
homework
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 every day. In conclusion, giving schoolwork to
children
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 every day has few possibilities that students can do better in the classroom,
however
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, there are more negative effects on the
children
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 on their physical health and social life which I believe can't
ignore
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.
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