Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computer should replace them. Howevee, others do not agree. Discuss both aides and give your opinion.

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The library is the original knowledge source
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many benefits
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knowledge development.
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trend of technology is increasing and a lot of
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easier than ever.
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, the government spend a lot of money to maintain
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libraries
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of computers and any electronic device that
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interest
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online. These are very useful technology because
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to
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everyone should
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unable to know about uploader details.
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user
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time.
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to
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use
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should not more than 8 hours.
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library
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use
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a lot of budgets for
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and
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to commute
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books
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limited for rent to home because of
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physical resources
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the
librarys
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libraries
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still remain some
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such
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as official data or
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because
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place
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many of good
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which high
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. In conclusion,
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strongly recommend for search
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on your
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or on
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because able to find our interest
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quickly.
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people
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should verify
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information
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before
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for their job. Additional danger from blue light
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to solve by
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monitor light. There is
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tip to protect
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user
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eye for
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term.
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