Some people think that libraries are a waste of resources and money so computer should replace them. Howevee, others do not agree. Discuss both aides and give your opinion.
The library is the original knowledge source
to
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for
people
for along
time which Correct your spelling
a long
contain
many benefits Change the verb form
contains
such
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as people
people
knowledge development. Change noun form
people's
Currently
trend of technology is increasing and a lot of Add a comma
,Currently
people
able
to Add a missing verb
are able
use
their smart phone
and Correct your spelling
smartphone
personal
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the personal
a personal
computer
to access any information
on internet
easier than ever. Add an article
the internet
Hence
, the government spend a lot of money to maintain librarys
to support human development.
On the one hand, Correct your spelling
libraries
library
advantage
of computers and any electronic device that Add an article
the advantage
an advantage
able
to access Add a missing verb
is able
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the internet
internet
can find Correct your spelling
Internet
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interest
information
by
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apply
people
able
to Add a missing verb
are able
quick
access the method or result in Replace the word
quickly
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a short-time
short-time
. Correct your spelling
short time
However
everyone should Add a comma
,However
aware
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be aware
for
data correction because Change preposition
of
we
unable to know about uploader details. Add a verb
arewe
werewe
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blue light from Correct your spelling
Additionally
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the monitor
monitor
is dangerous Fix the agreement mistake
monitors
of
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for
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the user
user
if Fix the agreement mistake
users
use
their computer
for long
time. Change the article
a long
Therefore
expertise recommend
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recommends
to
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using
use
computer
should not more than 8 hours.
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a computer
On the other hand
, disadvantage
library Correct article usage
the disadvantage
is
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is using
is used
use
a lot of budgets for sustain
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sustainability
uncomfortable
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are uncomfortable
to commute
. Change the verb form
commuting
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books Add a comma
,Moreover
still
limited for rent to home because of Add a missing verb
are still
physicaly resoure
. Correct your spelling
physical resources
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the Add a comma
,However
librarys
still remain some Correct your spelling
libraries
library
advantage
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advantages
such
as official data or information
because this
place contain
many of good Change the verb form
contains
information
which high reliability
.
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reliable
i
strongly recommend for search Change the capitalization
I
information
on your computer
or on smartphone
because able to find our interest Correct pronoun usage
your smartphone
information
quickly. However
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,However
people
should verify information
before Add an article
the information
apply
for their job. Additional danger from blue light Change the verb form
applying
able
to solve by Add a missing verb
is able
reduce
monitor light. There is Change the verb form
reducing
useful
tip to protect Add an article
a useful
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the user
user
eye for Change noun form
user's
long
term.Correct article usage
the long
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