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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009
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The pie chart above depicts the proportion of electricity generated by various
sources
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 of
energy
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 in 2009, all types and renewable
sources
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 in
Germany
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 and
France
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.
Germany
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 generated
energy
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 of 560 billion kWh in the year,
whereas
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France
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's production was a smaller number at 510 billion kWh. In
Germany
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, the source of
energy
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 for electricity is dominated by conventional thermal for 59,6%,
by contrast
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 in
France
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 it is the smallest with a share of only 10.3%.
On the other hand
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, in
France
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, the largest share came from nuclear at 76,0% and accounted for 23.0% in
Germany
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. In both countries, renewable
sources
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 are the least proportion with 17,4% and 13,7% respectively. In detail breakdown, these types of renewable
sources
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 consist of biomass, hydroelectric, wind, and solar with hydroelectric the largest proportion in
France
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 and biomass in
Germany
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 at 80,5% and 39,3% respectively, followed by wind as the second largest source with a share of 36,9% and 10,5% each. Solar power in
Germany
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 and
France
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 only accounted for 6,1% and 0,9% which is considered an insignificant amount. Neither in both countries utilize geothermal as a source of renewable
energy
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources, energy, germany, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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