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The diagram illustrate the process of Pu-erh Raw Tea and Ripe Tea production. Describe it.

The diagram illustrate the process of Pu-erh Raw Tea and Ripe Tea production. Describe it.
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The diagram highlights the steps involved in the production of Pu-erh Raw
Tea
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 and Ripe
Tea
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Initially
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,
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leafs
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leaves
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 are boiled in a pan to get rid of dangerous bacteria and
then
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 rolled on a surface to dry under the sunlight. The result of
this
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 stage is called loose raw
tea
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. The following stages are different for raw and ripe
tea
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. In
case
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the case
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 of raw
tea
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, the loose
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leafs
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leaves
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 are
being
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apply
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compressed and
then
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 left to age in
a
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apply
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storage. 
In contrast
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, for the production of ripe
tea
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, the loose
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leafs
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leaves
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 are compressed only after undergoing fermentation by
mold
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mould
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Overall
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, it can be seen that
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leafs
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leaves
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 must be processed before
turned
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turning
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 into ripe or raw
tea
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. The making processes for raw
tea
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 and ripe
tea
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 are the same at the beginning but slightly divert
at the end
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, leafs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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